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Monday 29 April 2013

WordPress Daily Prompt: Unleash your Inner Dickinson

National Poetry Writing Month is nearly at an end. To celebrate it, try your hand at some verse.
Train Departure Solothurn Main Station


Pregnant silence prevailed at the station
In the air something?
A mouse skipped over the rail
Hurrying to find refuge
Pigeons pecking scraps 
Took to the sky 
Humans gathered on the platform
Carrying bags
Pulling packed cases
A flurry
No, a wind engulfed time and space
A voice boomed out
The train arriving at platform 1….. 
blergle, bumble, blah
Deafening noise
An arrival, an appearance
Doors opening
People pushing
Jumbling up the entrance stairs
Mind the doors, the blow of a whistle
Silence prevailed
The train departed
The mouse returned, relieved 
Pigeons repossessed their crumbs
People gathered
Waiting for the next train
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4 comments:

  1. Anonymous29 April 2013 at 18:28

    Thanks for visiting The Ark's spot.
    I always wondered about the term Pregnant silence.
    In my experience as a husband and father pregnant was never silent.
    Cockney, hey?
    Had family in Mill Hill.
    Raised in Chester, myself.
    Been in South Africa since 79. More or less same story as yours.

    Nice to meet you!
    And you like cats too! Cor blimey...we have 14 and 3 dogs!

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    1. Pat Gerber-Relf29 April 2013 at 19:13

      My pregnant days are long past of course. I could become a granmother, but that it up to my sons. Mill Hill rings a bell, I think I used to play hockey there when I was at school. My cats have their own blogging site (The Cat Chronicles). Three are a handful, although I would love to have more. Mr. Swiss would not be so keen. Once a cockney I suppose always a cockney, but I now speak Swiss German most of the time.

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  2. Unknown29 April 2013 at 18:44

    Very nice poem.

    The plain language at the beginning is very appealing and draws one in.

    One question, is it supposed to be "Deafening" or "Defining" noise in line 15? Both could fit I suppose, but am not sure.

    In any case, I really like it, if you would like to check out some of my work, I just started a blog myself.

    http://vermilliongarcia.blogspot.com/

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    1. Pat Gerber-Relf29 April 2013 at 19:05

      My super spelling mistake - been to long away from the haven of the english language. Should read "deafening" of course. Have now changed it. Thanks for looking in. I do not do so much poetry, just now and again. I am more into prose. Will look in on your site.

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